I can see what I'm aiming at with 5A, but it's clumsy stuff and I should have scrapped it. "Murder your darlings," as they say. Otherwise, hmm, I like 2D but I'm a sucker for the "repetitions that must be parsed differently" gag. To my mind this is mostly rather workmanlike but unobjectionable cluing; but that's also hard for me to judge accurately. Why not give it a shot, and let me know.